Fight against my sins
The strong winter blew harder than ever before, while
millions of families are enjoying the celebration of Christ. I, am here, sitting
in this chair, rethinking all sins I have committed
over my lifetime. God was my hero, but thinking back
through my worst memories, He never
Was there. I finally get out of my chair and opened the
window to see nothing but the destruction right in front of me. “He can’t save
me now,” as I turned around, it changed
it shape, there was nothing, I jumped. What I see now is hell, as I go down, I
say “He could have saved me."
as i go down
ReplyDeleteyou forgot the period at the end of the story
ReplyDeletethere shouldn't be a capital O IT should be like , rethinking all sins i have committed over my live time.
ReplyDeletenice story, but you do not need to put a space between life time. it is one word. so it should be "lifetime" instead of "life time". also you capitalized the O in the first sentence. so it should go like: ,rethinking all sins I have committed over my lifetime. So no capital o. Also at the end it should go like this: , I say “He could have saved me." so change the had into a have. I just think it makes more sense. overall nice story. Also you do not really have a proper tittle for your story, i would suggest the tittle to be : My Flight To God.. overall nice story
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