100word challenge, A World War 2 story (some details in this story are not true, while
others are.)
Copenhagen,
Denmark ,1940, my family and I would walk up the hill every other day, for a
picnic. We would look upon the flag of the Jews. The flag would always point
south, when the wind’s direction changed. We believed it was a warning to hide
and run. We have never seen it but some have, my mother and I believed that we
were lucky and protected by the One above, but we were so wrong.
April 9, 1940,
my family and I went for our last picnic and we watched the flag once again, but as the weather changed, they.................. they, were
gone.
good story
ReplyDeleteI like your story but you cant have We've never seen it, You have to do We have never seen it.
ReplyDeleteYou wrote 'they' twice at your last sentence. Also, who were "they" in your last sentence?
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DeleteAlso, you can not have contractions in formal writing
DeleteAlso you wrote- we watch the flag once again. Change the word watch- we watched the flag once again.
ReplyDeletenice story
ReplyDelete- you have to double space after a period.
- you do not need a comma after /south/ in your 3rd sentence.
overall nice story