100word
challenge!
I am
still here, my child is all I have left. He is a boy named Noah and he is only
2 months old. I’d love to play with him if I could but everyday, he was alone
for 8 hours screaming for his father in a trailer with nothing to do but sleep.
All I could think about was getting these steel engines of my shoulder and feed Noah some baby
carrots to his tearful face. No more, I came home that day and sat on my mauve
couch and under that face of tears, I knew he was strong and could be too.
Nice story but fix these things.
ReplyDelete- in your last sentence when you use the word /strong/ you have a comma after it, I think there should be no comma after /strong/
- also in your third sentence you have capitalized the word /he/ you should make it lower case.
overall nice story.
also you should double space after a period, and you need to indent. also highlight the 5 words because then it will be easier for the reader to notice them.
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