100 word challenge week #16
year 1987 New
Year’s eve, ready to restart my life in better way than last year but I still I
had problems to fix in 1987 but I had to continue my life, if had to describe
in another form. Imagen you’re with your parents and you run down the alley way
alone and there’s a new video game you can buy on the other side. You look
front and get the video game or back to stay with your parents, same with my
problem now, I looked back then front,
which way. “My life awaits me,” I moved forward and never back again.
I would suggest you make these changes
ReplyDelete-instead of starting your story with /year/ start it with /The year/
-also before the word better in the first sentence, you should put /a/ so put /a/ before the word /better/ in the first sentence.
-also I think you don't need a comma after the word /life/ on the first sentence and the second time you used the word/life/.
-also in your story when you used the word/alley way/ it should actually be / alleyway/ so there is no space.
overall nice story