100word challenge
One day, in the U.S, two children are on
their summer vacation and with their mother out with friends, their father
wanted to try something with the kids, he wanted to try a science experiment
that made slime.
The children decided to give it a shot,
after an hour of errs they finally made their slime to play with, but it wasn’t
finished, it just needed one last steer, the slime dripped through the bowl,
making a mess of slime all over the table, but at least the children have
something to play with for the week.
I found quiet a few errors in your story
ReplyDelete1. first off what are you trying to say here?:two children are on their summer vacation and with their mother out with friends, it just doesn't make sense to me.
2.you spell errors like this not errs
3. stir not steer
That's all I have found that need to be corrected.
fix these errors
ReplyDeleteindent
double space
you spell errors like this not errs
stir not steer
overall nice story!